Can Anyone Correct My Essay Please?(2nd Body Paragraph)?
Posted by adminOne of these disorders, anorexia nervosa is a life-threatening condition of self imposed starvation, and has reached epidemic proportions spanning all age groups of both sexes. Now a days, its not only girls and women who suffer from anorexia any more. Studies suggest that 5 to 10 percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males. Victims who suffer anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent body damages such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, pancreatitis, Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. They may also develop shrunken organs, bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. Some other people with anorexia may develop irregular heartbeat which lead to cardiac arrest and much more.
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“One of these disorders, anorexia nervosa, is a life-threatening condition of self-imposed starvation that has reached epidemic proportions. Nowadays, women aren’t the only ones who suffer from anorexia. Studies suggest that 5 to 10 percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males. Victims who suffer anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent body damages such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, and pancreatitis. Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. They may also develop shrunken organs and suffer bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. In some cases, people with anorexia may develop irregular heartbeat which can lead to cardiac arrest and a number of other significant health problems.”
One of these disorders, anorexia nervosa, is a life-threatening condition of self imposed starvation, and has reached epidemic proportions, spanning all age groups of both sexes. Now a days, it’s not only females who suffer from anorexia. Studies suggest that 5 to 10 percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males. Victims who suffer anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent damage to the body such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, and pancreatitis. Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. People with eating disorders may also develop shrunken organs, bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. Other people with anorexia may develop irregular heartbeat which can lead to cardiac arrest and many more problems.
I’m not sure if that’s 100% correct, but I fixed some things. Remember to indent!
One of these disorders, anorexia nervosa, is a life-threatening condition of self-imposed starvation, and has reached epidemic proportions spanning all age groups of both sexes. Nowadays, it’s not only girls and women who suffer from anorexia. Studies suggest that five to ten percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males. Victims who suffer from anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent body damage such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, and pancreatitis. Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. They may also develop shrunken organs or suffer from bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. Other people with anorexia develop an irregular heartbeat which could lead to cardiac arrest and much more.
Pretty good. Here are my suggestions:
One of these disorders, anorexia nervosa is a life-threatening condition of self imposed starvation, and has reached epidemic proportions spanning all age groups of both sexes. Nowadays, it’s not only girls and women who suffer from anorexia. Studies suggest that 5 to 10 percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males. Victims who suffer anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent physical impairments such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, pancreatitis, Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. They may also develop shrunken organs, bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. Other people with anorexia may develop irregular heartbeat which could lead to cardiac arrest and even death.
Here’s what I came up with, just a few minors things (make 2 paragraphs)….
One of these disorders, anorexia nervosa is a life-threatening condition of self imposed starvation, and has reached epidemic proportions spanning all age groups of both sexes. Today it’s not only girls and women who suffer from anorexia any more; studies suggest that 5 to 10 percent of people with anorexia or bulimia are males.
Victims who suffer anorexia develop dangerous and sometimes permanent body damages such as liver damage, menstrual problems, dizziness, fainting, heart problems, baldness, pancreatitis. Some develop malnutrition, a condition in which the body doesn’t get the nutrients it needs to grow and function properly. They may also develop shrunken organs, bone loss, low body temperature, low blood pressure, and a slowed metabolism. Some other people with anorexia may develop irregular heartbeat which lead to cardiac arrest and much more.